In My City(my first pre-writing drop)

[RichBoy]

In my city we live by on rule you either trap or die
im in the streets hustlin all night tryin to stay alive
tryin to feed my kids trying to pay this rent im just tryin to survive
but how can i wit this minimal wage how am i suppose to provide
riding threw tha city with robbery on my mind
babymama by my side telling me dont worry bout a thing cus no
matter wat happens yo will get by

Course x3 - The things on my mind when i be sliding by in my city
in my cityyyy


Im from the city were it shines all day
i love my city to death from palm beach to bell glade
rawvier to westgate cant forget bout boyton and delray
my city we got the finest females around
cant deny it niggas palm beach got the best pussy hands down
from snowbunnies to red bones wit thick hips
to the spanish gurls wit the cute lips
cant forget bout my niggas who hold it down for real
no matter wat set u claim bloods crips folks and kings we all share the same thing love for palm beach so lets keep it trill
to ya out of towners be carefull were ya stop at
cus the wrong turn a get ya rob shot left for dead to were u stand at
i now it mite sound bad to sum of ya
but i put on for my city to the fullest till tha day i fall

course x3 - The things on my mind when i be sliding by in my city
in my cityyyy



tell me what ya think for my first drop eva i now i got work on my vocab n wordplay any feedback welcome

[baby D-cannonz]

lik da flow and how ya rep ya city, just need more vocab.
cant ask for more. 100%. give me some feed please, wanna know what cha think.

[Block Boy]

My personal opinion is, that you dont really need a big vocabulary in rap, as long as ur real expressin urself.......I mean hell my fav rappers like Kanye, Game, Weezy, Clipse, T.I don't have a vocab like that, but they still real. Cause its how they express themselves.....Personally I think big words can stop you from sayin whats really on ur mind.

This was hot. Where u from btw?

[Young Moe]

Tru that^^^
But honestly fuck vocab....
But its good to have it...
Nah mean for the sinple reasons of using multi's
The bigger word bank the easier the rhymes ill let loose nah mean...
I could drop a tut to explain what multi's are and that'll also introduce you to using inners for longer lines such as yours....
but enough about knowlegde....

Ya had the flow goin, the basic rhymes, but overall it'll be a 6/10...
Ya can only get better..stay at it..

[BeastNasty]

omg,that was some nice stuff,I like it a lot

[outlawzzz]

nice flow man, keep it going

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